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Thursday, 26 September 2019

random girl part one

I stood outside of my best friend's house waiting for her to come out side. I was standing behind the door step. The yard was really small it had a small oak tree in bottom left corner of the yard. I was about to turn around and head to subway. In the corner of my eye the wooden door suddenly started to lend ford. Suddenly my phone rang I searched through my pocket in my ripped jeans as soon as I saw the phone  I pressed the green phone button “hello this is violet speaking “ I casually said “Hey violet its rose…” my best friend whispered “Where are you?!?!” I questioned Rose took a few seconds to reply “my mum said I had to go to my little sisters 1 hour beauty pageant “ she mumbled. I could tell she was sad “ so I can't go to the water park today ” she replied. “It’s fine don't worry. We'll go tomorrow ” I turned my phone off and glared at what was in side of the brick house.
I stared at the rose's dad he was wearing seven large pink bows he tied in to his short blond hair. He was dancing and jumping on all the clean white furniture wearing caroline’s (AKA rose’s sister) short girly tutu he had lipstick smeared all over his face. He was screaming the song i'm blue but whenever you're supposed say blue he says gay. I was trying to not laugh so I pulled out my phone and recorded everything ( ͡° ͜ʖ ( ͡° ͜ʖ ( ͡° ͜ʖ ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) ͜ʖ ͡°)ʖ ͡°)ʖ ͡°). As soon as he saw me he screamed “YoU sAW nOthING!”
I slowly turned around and walked away “where should I go next ” I wondered should I go to subway. Suddenly my phone vibrated I pulled It out of my pocket it was a phone call from my mum “Hi mum do you need anything” I happily asked “Can you buy some COFFEY she screamed “...Umm… don't you work at the supermarket ” I questioned “meh coffey ant here i'm outside the final countdown NOT IN SIDE THE FINAL COUNTDOWN ¨ she screamed louder than before ̈Then just go back in side...̈ I confusedly asked  “OK MEH CHILD” she screamed after I hang up but I could hear her voice because her voice echoed 
       To be continued

9 comments:

  1. Tell me about what you think part two should be about.
    I would love to hear!

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  2. i liked how you sayed to roses dad that you (try not to laugh so I pulled out my phone and recorded everything) sayed i even hope we can do the next one if you let me. my favriote part was the heyyyyy faceeeeees.

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    2. I can make another one I just need some more Ideas. Can you give mee ideas

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  3. i will appreciate if you do let me help and thank you for showing me ideas for some parts of your stoy if i am. thank you for your time

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  4. what is your best background? (challenge's)

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  5. Hello Heidi,
    maybe you should fix up the spelling and the grammar. Like the part you said stared at the rose's dad just remove the from the part.
    I like they way you added funny things and those Lenny Faces.
    This reminds me of the time I wrote a story.

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  6. hey Heidi its meh your BFF Naya
    I like the way u made it about a random girl.
    next time u could put a name in it like in part 2 or 3
    didn't I see u making it I think that in the past I might have did a random girl story

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  7. hello Heidi
    its Taylor
    i love the way you described everything
    maybe next time you could read through more carefully
    this reminds me when i write A story

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